Paper 1 Question 5: Descriptive Writing

What is it asking?

• This relies on sensory detail (sight, touch, sound, taste, smell) to create an image of an object, person, place or emotion.

Timings

Marks	Timings
Break down: AO5 • [24] AO6 • [16] Total: [40]	35-40 minutes

Structure

To achieve the highest grades in descriptive writing you should focus on a clear and coherent structure that showcases their ability to create vivid imagery, use a variety of language techniques, and maintain reader engagement. Here's a suggested structure:

Section	Description	Example
Introduction	Set the Scene: Start with a strong opening that sets the tone and context. Use Vivid Imagery: Introduce the setting with descriptive language. • Engage the Senses: Include sensory details to draw the reader in.	"The sun dipped below the horizon, casting a golden glow across the tranquil lake. The gentle rustle of leaves and the soft chirping of crickets filled the air, creating a symphony of nature's lullaby."
Build-Up	• Develop the Setting: Expand on the initial description, adding more layers of detail. • Introduce Characters or Elements: If relevant, introduce any characters or focal points with rich descriptions. • Use Language Techniques: Incorporate similes, metaphors, etc.	"The towering trees, ancient sentinels of the forest, stood guard over the pristine waters. Their branches swayed gracefully, whispering secrets to the wind. A solitary heron, regal and poised, glided silently across the glassy surface."
Main Description	• Focus on Key Details: Zoom in on specific elements that are central to the scene. • Show Emotions and Atmosphere: Convey the mood and emotions associated with the scene. • Vary Sentence Structure: Use a mix of short and long sentences to maintain rhythm and interest.	"Clusters of wildflowers dotted the shore, their vibrant colors a stark contrast to the deep green foliage. The scent of pine mingled with the earthy aroma of damp soil, creating a heady fragrance. A sense of peace enveloped the area, a sanctuary untouched by time."
Climax	• Highlight a Pivotal Moment: Introduce a peak moment or shift in the scene. • Use Dynamic Language: Employ strong verbs and impactful descriptions to emphasize the climax.	"As the last rays of sunlight vanished, the sky transformed into a canvas of stars, twinkling like diamonds on velvet. The night brought a chill, and the once serene lake now shimmered under the moon's ethereal light."
Conclusion	• Reflect on the Scene: Summarize the overall impression or emotional impact. • End with a Strong Image or Thought: Leave the reader with a lasting image or idea.	"With the world settling into quiet slumber, the lake stood as a testament to nature's beauty, a timeless reflection of tranquillity and wonder."

Top tips:

• Show, Don't Tell: Use detailed descriptions to show the scene rather than just telling the reader about it.
• Use a Wide Range of Vocabulary: Choose words that are precise and evoke strong images.
• Maintain Coherence and Cohesion: Ensure that the writing flows smoothly from one idea to the next.
• Edit and Revise: Check for any grammatical errors, awkward phrasing, or unnecessary repetition.